Have
You seen
The way pain
Makes time stagnant?
Every moment seems
A painful, frosty night
Whereas happiness makes time
Rush away within blink of eyes
Like a sweet, rosy dream of midnight
Gone before we could totally grasp it.
The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 unrhymed lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written in 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1 order.
surely, surely
ReplyDeletehave a nice Sunday Purba
much love...
You too, Gillena :)
DeleteLove the comparison of pain to a frosty night! Powerful writing :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Sanaa. Glad you loved it :)
DeleteSo true.. in bliss the time will pass with the blink of an eye.
ReplyDeleteExactly. That happens so often :)
DeleteI liked this form....and your words rain down with truth....
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Donna :)
Delete"like a sweet rosy dream of midnight". How I love that!
ReplyDeleteSo glad you loved it, Sherry :)
DeleteSo true, I think. When a person is happy time goes way too fast; but when one is unhappy it seems to stand still. I like the way you have used the etheree form.
ReplyDeleteExactly Mary. This happens so often and how and why we still wonder. Time is really an enigma.
DeleteThank you so much :)
With such ease you say convey such deep meanings is so wonderful. The form of poetry is wonderful and you have used it with such precision. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Gaurab. I also loved this form and so tried to use it for conveying this truth/wonder. I am so happy that you liked the poem :)
DeletePerfectly completed this not easy form, and in timely manner!
ReplyDeleteSo so true.....time is a trickster and pain and happiness further delude us....
ReplyDeleteA good thought ... a joyful perceptive ... to reflect on, in such dark days.
ReplyDeleteDidiiii You make each form of poetry so meaningful n convey a message <3 *how much I love your poems* ^_^
ReplyDeleteNice one
ReplyDeleteA new kind, I don't think I have read this kind of poem before.
ReplyDeleteReads good and I liked the thoughts you penned.
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ReplyDeleteIt's awesome Purba :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a perceptive poem - painful times do seem to last longer than fleeting happiness and yet both (i hope) are present...we must treasure the happy times most definitely
ReplyDeleteWow, this one seems new for me, I was never known to this. You have portrayed such a deep thought in such a condensed form. Superbly penned dearie :*
ReplyDeleteI can see some new styles of poetry as a writer.
ReplyDeleteGreat Post..!!
Lovely delicate attempt and you are good at it.
ReplyDeleteTheory of relativity explained poetically!
ReplyDeleteGone before we could totally grasp it.
ReplyDeleteAll good things must come to an end so they say. But it ends too fast. Truly said Purba!
Hank
So very apt
ReplyDeleteIt's beautiful! How can you concentrate on the intricacies of the syllables, while maintaining the beauty of the poetry is beyond me! I'm unable to do that in a haiku too! :D
ReplyDeleteNicely done, putting the longest time in the shortest lines!
ReplyDeleteWell done Purba!
ReplyDeleteVery nice.
ReplyDeleteA very nice poetry!
ReplyDeletebeing in pain or anxiety seems to extend a second or a minute into hours. sometimes, we wish to disappear for a moment
ReplyDeleteIndeed, Pain freezes time. Those last 2 lines said it all
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Awesome. Nice to know about Etheree too which I was not aware.
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I liked this poem, a new way of expression.
ReplyDeleteInsightful lines! loved its simplicity.
ReplyDeleteLoved this poetryPurba. Its beautiful. Will try out this form.
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